Interesting flow with the woman's head breaking up the flow to become the focus point of the strip. Should have something to tell the viewer which way to start reading at first... Maybe you could have the first panel slightly bigger and then have the woman's head "interrupting" the flow to bring the comic to the dramatic or unexpected twist.
Your art just stays great! I really like the waitress' head breaking the panel border. Her relatively unlined face is a good contrast and focal point for the whole page- it's clear you put a lot of thought into your pages as individual complete works, with the panels as components. you're really making me reexamine my own stuff! Thanks!
Thank you very much... just trying out stuff I've noticed other artists do on this site (which is one of the main things Deviant is for) so anything I can pass on just makes me feel validated that I'm moving on as an artist... thanks for the good words!